Iya Ythmir

Hmm. What I want to point out first is that wine isn't red. Okay, so maybe I'm going a little overboard on that tiny detail but it's just that I ...

Like what those above me have said, this piece is more "dialogue-driven". Although I know what's happening through the things they say, I don't think it's going to work in ...

The nitpicking has been done by GML so I won't bother repeating it. :D The concept of the story is nice and exciting, especially with the ending. Though, unlike GML, ...

Yes! Finally, the third! Woot! It's pretty exciting and I'm looking forward to the fourth chapter. What I've wanted to say has already been said. The sequence of the events ...

Finally, I'm able to read your second chapter. Truly sorry for the delay, but I had to rush at a few things yesterday. Okay, so here I go. :D Nothing ...

I'm reading it now. And I must say that it is indeed a great work for humanities. I'm loving Vida Winter. :D And the style of Diane Setterfield's writing seems ...

I just finished reading your Prologue, and here I am at your first chapter. Anyway, they've already mention the Animorphs, so I won't repeat that. Also, I know this has ...

Personally, I loved this. I'm really attached to wolves (and werewolves) and have, at times, wished I could also shapeshift (into a werewolf of course), so I'm really glad that ...

I haven't read the first version of your prologue... :? So, I can't say much and what I did want to say has already been pointed out by the others. ...

The next morning, my emotion-liquor hangover allowed me to get out of bed and dressed without feeling my newly-realized heartache. I didn’t feel my heart tear as I started to ...

Hooray for the first chapter! Here's the critique. (By the way, I love Isaac's nickname ^^) “Florence,” he said. “It‘s ‘thieves’ vinegar.’ that‘s what they called it, anyway” he said

Just a few things I noticed. “We should look for the son,” said the shorter man said. The words were foreign, yet familiar. The boy's mind reeled; it was the ...

Gripping. This is wonderful and exciting for a first chapter. I suggest more emotions coming from the main character by the time she crashed and afterwards. Somehow, those parts felt ...

Powerfrul. Stunning. Captivating. There isn't much I have left to say, only that your work is a wonderful piece. I like it the way it is formatted since this is ...

Here's a quick review. I turned away from him and shut my eyes and without a word, stepped into the center of the lake, and as I did so, I ...